Comments on: The Hitman’s Hole of Cash

By: petrakidd11

petrakidd11 — Wed, 11 Feb 2009 15:42:09 +0000

I think it would be an interesting experiment. It’s a great way to get people involved and see things through someone else’s eyes, give it a go!

By: corfubob

corfubob — Wed, 11 Feb 2009 15:14:17 +0000

I am sure to return. I need some of your courage to write a bit. I would like to serialize a story and maybe use blog comments to edit the next installment. Does that seem over-ambitious? Dr Awsome will help me with the longer words…

By: petrakidd11

petrakidd11 — Mon, 09 Feb 2009 18:07:00 +0000

Thank you for your valid criticisms – I will try harder, sometimes the stories run away with me and although I know editing is crucial it’s not my strong point.

I hope you enjoyed some of the stories despite the errors and will return.

By: corfubob

corfubob — Sun, 08 Feb 2009 23:46:44 +0000

I read all the stories down to here, but i got slightly cross with you on a couple of occasions. You have to re-read and edit more often, cut the cliches as well.

1. she is in the toilet rehearsing and at the table at the same instant.

2. you don’t did frozen soil under a tree with a spade.

3. gab died before burying the cash.

4. the opportunity for the murder was unplanned, anyone could have been passing. Not likely but it’s a murder for goodness’ sake.